One-sentence summary: An animal-loving city girl moves to the country and meets a wild turkey hen she can mysteriously communicate with–but school and turkey hunting season are starting.
Ehh, not so great. It’s 28 words long, whereas Randy recommends 15 or shorter. He also says it should tie the big picture to the personal picture–I think it does that.
A transplanted city girl meets a wild turkey hen and finds they can talk to each other–but hunting season is coming. (22)
In the woods, before hunting season, a city girl meets a wild turkey hen and discovers they can communicate. (19)
OK, that’s good enough for now.